Wednesday Threesome

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Taken in God’s hands,
my life begins to crumble
like some day-old bread.
 
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Drawn across my cheek—
the line your hot finger traced
in its fiery wrath.
 
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An uneasy truce—
I rise to greet the morning
with an upraised fist.

 
© 2012 by Magical Mystical Teacher
 
More Three Word Wednesday: “Crumble, Drawn, Uneasy”

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Posted on August 8, 2012, in haiku, Three Word Wednesday. Bookmark the permalink. 10 Comments.

  1. jcosmonewbery | August 8, 2012 at 6:07 am

    Feisty approach! I like it.

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  2. Paige | August 8, 2012 at 8:42 am

    visceral haiku, each wise and on target.

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  3. Sheilagh Lee | August 8, 2012 at 10:43 am

    a lot of anger in these three haikus it really comes through.

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  4. 4joy | August 8, 2012 at 12:22 pm

    Espec. loved the last – that ‘up-raised fist’ gave me chills…..

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  5. oldegg | August 8, 2012 at 4:53 pm

    This certainly reflects the religious fervour seen so much these days. Love seems so far from this piece which is so vividly expressed.

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  6. flipside records | August 8, 2012 at 10:50 pm

    “Taken in God’s hands,
    my life begins to crumble
    like some day-old bread.” … This is so true. It’s like He has to shred us apart before turning us into something edible (or something like that). :) But you’re probably just talking about death and the fact that a life is really only like a day in the scheme of things.

    “Drawn across my cheek—
    the line your hot finger traced
    in its fiery wrath.” … Your turn in the last line is really good. The first two lines sound sexual, but then you make it about anger instead. I like the word “traced,” as if a permanent mark has already been made there and she is just going over it again.

    “An uneasy truce—
    I rise to greet the morning
    with an upraised fist.” … Better to keep your guard up than get sucker punched. :)

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  8. rmpWritings | August 9, 2012 at 12:20 pm

    powerful piece.

    is the upraised fist… a curse to what has happened? a triumphant wave of I can beat this? a fear it all happening again?

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  9. Ellecee | August 10, 2012 at 6:21 am

    Strong messages – excellent Haiku. Enjoyed them very much.

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