One More Whirl with Robert Hass
The first line of each haiku or senryu is taken from poems in Time and Materials by Robert Hass.
This week’s whirling words are: tip, fix, tinted, preludes, vivid, tinny, drifts,
nick, waves, gentle, limbs, insidious, split
In the dusty streets
she stabs the tip of her cane,
dotting her way home.
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Let it be noted
that if I fix anything,
it will fall apart.
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In the old paintings
the women’s lips are tinted
the color of plums.
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If she tells fortunes,
they are but preludes to tales
that will never end.
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Is a work of art
as vivid as a headache
hammering one’s brain?
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To be poetry,
the words must not be tinny,
but mellifluous.
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In the desert sky
lazily a buzzard drifts,
seeking carrion.
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The soaked red backpack,
the nick in the green apple—
songs of summer lost.
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the tentative sounds
of waves nibbling at the shore
with little mice teeth
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She wept beside him,
she of gentle demeanor,
he of granite heart.
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a Japanese plum
its limbs burdened and groaning
with ripe crimson fruit
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Your poem ended
with three insidious words
my tongue will not tell.
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Harlequin sparrows
split sunrise with their chatter—
tiny razor tongues!
© 2012 by Magical Mystical Teacher
More The Sunday Whirl, Wordle 70
More The Poetry Pantry #111
Posted on August 19, 2012, in haiku, senryu, The Poetry Pantry, The Sunday Whirl. Bookmark the permalink. 23 Comments.
VERY VERY NICE!
Lovely.
Oh my … this one, for me is so exquisitely delicious I want to take a big bite
In the old paintings
the women’s lips are tinted
the color of plums.
Enjoyed these. Chuckled about the fortune teller’s tales. Indeed I picture them as telling tales that never end, getting a person to come back again and again and yet again… Oh, and I love the word ‘mellifluous.’ It just bubbles on my tongue!
the tentative sounds
of waves nibbling at the shore
with little mice teeth
Harlequin sparrows
split sunrise with their chatter—
tiny razor tongues!
These two are my favorites – but I enjoyed them all.
I’m here:
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lovely set … you are just too good
Another beautiful presentation. I especially like the first.
I so look forward to these haiku from the Wordle words each week. Little mice teeth for waves, plum lips on old paintings… your images are, as always, wonderful.
Thank you. Your participation lies at the heart of The Whirl.
Each haiku a vivid picture for us to read. That first one make me want to go out and find this woman to take her picture. I am so glad to realize that you take photos too! !xo teri
Love these, Magical. Humour and sadness throughout.
Pamela
Each is a treasure; there is no way to denote my favorite.
These are really lovely! Such vivid writing!
You are a Haiku wordl expert, par excellence.
Number 2 is totally me!!!! Great ones
Very clever and also delightful.
I too love the plum lips, the mice teeth and all the rest. The best for me today is your promise not to tell. Thanks so much for the inspiration.
Elizabeth
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She wept beside him,
she of gentle demeanor,
he of granite heart.
You caught the often seen seeds of the beginnings of a heart break here! You ran through the whole gamut of life in the others most brilliantly MMT!
Hank
These are both magical and mystical! And you’ve taught me a few things! Living up to your hype beautifully!
Love them all, always a pleasure to read what you come up with.
Thank you! Most of the time I’m surprised at what I come up with–which is the way it should be!
These are very lovely……..each has such a clear mood, very crisp.
love these, such a variety! Norma Ruttan Come visit my blog at… http://scrappygrams.blogspot.com
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