Half a Whirl with Richard Wright
The first line of each haiku or senryu is the last line from several haiku in Haiku: This Other World by Richard Wright.
This week’s whirling words are:
dusk, link, trace, empty, essentials, rose, pencils, fence, chain, recipe, forgiven, operator
Huddling together
they decide to link their fate
with the hummingbirds’.
~~ ~~ ~~
stop your chattering
trace a new path for yourself
through seas of silence
~~ ~~ ~~
in a musty barn
cobweb shivering at dusk—
one hapless horsefly
~~ ~~ ~~
Weaving autumn mists
in and out the picket fence—
fragile tapestry.
~~ ~~ ~~
gently mocking me
the pencils on my desktop
every lead broken
~~ ~~ ~~
On a bed of stars
one empty corner beckoned—
there she weaves her dreams.
© 2012 by Magical Mystical Teacher
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Posted on August 25, 2012, in haiku, Richard Wright, senryu, The Poetry Pantry, The Sunday Whirl. Bookmark the permalink. 37 Comments.
Those mocking pencils? I know them well! (I suspect every writer does.) Good whirl!
Ah “mocking pencils”… Oh I see I am echoing Mark M. … Especially evocative powerful image.
You do like to make life difficult for yourself! Cento wordling haiku! (see Joseph Harker’s latest haiku Reverie at http://namingconstellations.wordpress.com/2012/08/25/reverie-thirty-four-a-sensation-of-space/)
I love the broken pencils!
Even with mocking and shivering, these did give a calming vibe.
gently mocking me
the pencils on my desktop
every lead broken
…genius! Love it.
Magical spilling of beautiful images! Especially love the idea of “fragile tapestry”!
Ah, but isn’t it better to have broken pencils than the feel as the hapless horsefly must! Loved them all!
Really liked them all but, the last one I found, so beautiful.
Love dream weaving from a bed of stars!
Oh, this collection is stunning…especially love the image of the cobwebs…horsefly in the barn. Great idea to use the lines from pre-existing poems…really sparking the muse for new!
stop your chattering
trace a new path for yourself
through seas of silence
Great advice MMT! There is always room for improvement if we care to explore. Accompanied by maturity in silence is a good option. Nice write!
Hank
The autumn mists have already begun to” weave in and out”. Lovely collection.
I enjoyed this set. I really liked:
gently mocking me
the pencils on my desktop
every lead broken
(and possibly because I went with a twist on broken pencils also… broken in half as symbolism – but I love the mockingness of all those broken leads!)
I especially like the third and fourth… so vivid, beautiful…
http://lkharris-kolp.blogspot.com/2012/08/when-poets-joined-to-play.html
This surely weaves a dream !!!
The imagery here is absolutely fantastic!
The second and 6th stanzas really really caught my eye – really really enjoyable read!
I look forward to your wordle haiku every week. I did the same this time around in response to Joseph Harker’s prompt and thought of you while I was wordling.
well how often have we all stared at those maddening pencils! “gently mocking me/the pencils on my desktop/ every lead broken”
I love it
stop your chattering
trace a new path for yourself
through seas of silence …. oh I’d love to have this printed on a tee shirt!
I loved the pencils mocking–beautifully done!
SO beautiful, especially the last line. I love the web in the barn too – barns can be very webby!
Wonderful series MMT … I loved reading these. I think I will try this Sunday Whirl myself next week. looks a nice way to write haiku on.
Very nice work, MMT – I especially love the last one.
Beautiful, each and everyone, as usual, love the broken leads of all the pencils.
I saved you for an evening read.
Lovely, all of them. Your idea of starting lines is great. These have been such a treat to read.
To be saved for an evening read is an honor indeed! Thank you!
these are wonderful – is it still considered a glossa I wonder, if the poem’s a haiku – in any event, I think the idea’s a brilliant one … I think I’d like to link my fate with the hummingbird’s …
http://seingrahamsays.wordpress.com/2012/08/26/shifting-colours/
Help me, please! The only “glossa” I know about is the Greek word for “tongue.” Is there another meaning?
Hi Richard – this gave me pause so I did some hunting and found you a link (and some better info for myself) – I am used to a , “glosa” (I apologize first for miss-spelling the form) as something the great PK Page used and also as a form where one could use only the first line of another poet’s work to start with (which I see is a very loose interpretation of the form) … as you’ll see from this, there’s little known about it and the form is quite rigid actually but has come to be bastardized and used in several fashions. I know poets personally who use it the way I describe (one famous line to start or base their own poem on, but always attributing the line etc.) and I will likely do the same as I really love the idea. If you know of another form that does this, I would love to know what it is. I am familiar with the cento and have written several which of course is along the same lines.
Here’s the link I mentioned:
http://www.poetry-nut.com/glosa_poetry.htm
I write with a pen now. I bet you do too since your leads are all broken. Cooly wordled.
A great set maybe weaving autumn mists for me it is a hard choice and great usage of the words
Weaving autumn mists
in and out the picket fence—
fragile tapestry.
My fav. Though I’ve seen those pencils myself…
I really liked the haiku with the horsefly something about the imagery. The last one was delightful as well.
not only 1/2 dozen beautifully worded haiku, but cento haiku (which I looked up)…and using wordles, too……I realize how little i know about this art form of poetry…
I don’t know very much about haiku, either. I learn more every day!
It always a pleasure to read you works. That pencil one is just perfect, just perfectly true too.
I could add ‘a mocking computer or keyboard’! you have such a way with words!