Half a Whirl Is Better than None

The first line of each haiku or senryu below is taken from Shu Ting‘s poem “The Singing Flower,” translated from the Chinese by Carolyn Kizer.
This week’s whirling words are: split, bruise, crumple, draw, burst, pierce, crash, chisel, crouch, glow, edge, beat

Linger in the cage,
crouch snarling in the corner
till your keeper comes.
~~ ~~ ~~
An indecent dream
creeps to the edge of my sleep,
startling me awake.
~~ ~~ ~~
Poems may travel
with a sudden burst of speed
or a dreadful sigh.
~~ ~~ ~~
Crows that pester us,
how dare you bruise our garden
with your deadly beaks!
~~ ~~ ~~
Raise your lamp, my love,
let its glow light my way home—
river of longing.
~~ ~~ ~~
Into harmony
draw me with your sweet singing—
thorns grow on my tongue.

© 2012 by Magical Mystical Teacher
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Posted on June 3, 2012, in haiku, senryu, The Poetry Pantry, The Sunday Whirl. Bookmark the permalink. 15 Comments.

  1. I love your sweet haiku … and you’re right, half is better than none … “crouch snarling in the corner” indeed.


  2. MMT, a brilliant concept, well written. Nice work.

  3. It seems nearly all of you haiku’s this week have a bit of a surprise twist in them. I like that. my fave….
    “Into harmony
    draw me with your sweet singing—
    thorns grow on my tongue.”

    And you know half is more than none….

  4. love the first three, a laugh for the first, nod for the second and yes, a sigh for the third.

  5. My first one is my favourite.

  6. I should say, your first one.

  7. I love all of these, but my favorite I think is the first one.

    I am a first time whirler: http://nonersays.blogspot.com/2012/06/365-creativity-project-day-1.html

  8. Wow, unique and wonderful, every stanza/verse.

  9. Lovely, as always… I especially like the 3rd one this week.

  10. I agree with Laurie – I especially like #3. Thank you as always for your visit and kind comments to my wordle.

  11. I’ll take your half-dozen any day. Enjoyed each and every one.


  12. I love thorns grow on my tongue….. Excellent work. You make my day whether it’s Sunday or Monday. 😉

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