How She Whirls

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~~ 1 ~~
Who is the woman
nestled in that tiny space
beneath the rafters?
~~ 2 ~~
old charwoman sings
mopping the floor by degrees
sunrise to sunset
~~ 3 ~~
She begins to move
toward the vision in her heart—
a fluttering moth.
~~ 4 ~~
She eats only fruit,
persuaded by what she dreamed
to eschew all flesh.
~~ 5 ~~
how she whirls
refusing to stay
in one place
~~ 6 ~~
when her period
becomes a big question mark
her worries begin
~~ 7 ~~
If the moment comes
when all her years fall away,
what will she do then?
~~ 8 ~~
But for one small song,
she has no tribute to bring
to wise old raven.

© 2013 by Magical Mystical Teacher
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Posted on August 18, 2013, in haiku, senryu, The Sunday Whirl and tagged , . Bookmark the permalink. 20 Comments.

  1. Beautifully done! The way you put the words in the form of a haiku!

  2. A lot can be said of the hardships and life of a hard-working woman! Great haiku set MMT!


  3. I like them all…especially #6. I wrote about “she” too.

  4. I like # 7…it inspires I’m not entirely convinced that any of us have anything to bring to the wild old raven save a small pebble or perhaps an acorn we have picked up along the way

  5. These poems, taken individually are quite lovely. But I like the possibility that this is one poem, about many women. The question in the first three lines seems to have as many answers as there are women. And the final verse is the one answer universal to all women (and men) You always bowl me over on Sundays,MM

  6. Again, I like what you do and how you do it. Especially like the last one, but all the others lead up to it, so they all count. These are all very visual and are like snapshots, one after another. All depicting a journey, a life well lived.


  7. What an inspired set. I especially like the one line “how she whirls”. These three words were worth the trip to me.

  8. great haiku sequence; have a nice Sunday

    much love…

  9. I really enjoyed this haiku sequence!

  10. In this case the 8 small songs delighted this old bird a lot!

  11. The charlady are gradually becoming a thing of the past, what with modern gadgets and means, they are now adopting a modern name too – housekeeping department!! 😉

  12. great job using these words! I found that this list got my juices flowing, as it did yours.

  13. Quite a collection – pieces together a story nicely.

  14. veronicabalfourpaul

    Hmmm Who is the little lady in the rafters, indeed. Loved this. The simplicity yet with so many images and Ieft a bit hanging at the end. I like it. And wonder if there are a lot of us who have relationships with crows… wise birds

  15. the char woman, raven, and river songs; takes me to a fairy tale land

    much love…

  16. You give this woman such grace and an air of mystery! Love that you used haiku. Well done.

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