Two-Word Whirl

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wet laundry
snapping on the line
gust by gust
~~ ~~ ~~
lost lamb
shepherd calls
faint bleat

Text © 2013 by Magical Mystical Teacher
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Posted on September 1, 2013, in Carpe Diem, haiku, September Heights 2013, The Sunday Whirl and tagged . Bookmark the permalink. 22 Comments.

  1. I picture a lovely spring morning…not sure if that’s where you were headed or not.

  2. Wow! I haven’t seen a clothes line in many, many years! Brought back such good memories. Thanks!
    The second poem evokes much sadness though…..although with a smidgen of hope in the last line!

  3. I love laundry on the line…. and think maybe the lamb got wrapped up in the sheets. 🙂

  4. a childhood memory in the first

    second is hopeful


  5. love the laundry line and I hope the faint bleat is heard! Very nice!

  6. I loved the “onomatopoeia” feeling of both pieces with ‘snapping’ and ‘gust’ and ‘calls’ and ‘bleat’.

  7. First one; perfection. My rotary line clunked me on the head after a suddenly gust of wind yesterday. I am sportin’ a bump and a bruise.

    • magicalmysticalteacher

      I am old enough that when I read “rotary line,” the first thing that came to mind was “telephone.” Then I wondered why a telephone would hit you in the head! Took me a minute to realise that “rotary line” means “whirling, twirling clothesline.” 😉

  8. I love the way those last two words called to you, and prompted these beautiful lines. 🙂

  9. Nice sounds in both haiku, and images’re staying with me.. for while…lol nicely done

  10. luv the animation in the laundry ku

    much love…

  11. I love this! I love the sound of wet laundry snapping in the wind and the sound of sheep in the hills. Really neat. 5 stars!

  12. Very vocal these. Both sounds described so well:)

  13. Look for A Lovely Thing

    I like these. They’re minimalist! Awesome!

  14. strangely
    your second one resonates
    with my free style


  15. Love the second one “the faint bleat” it is “hopeful”. very nicely penned 🙂

  16. Oh, they create brilliant images, MMT!! Stunning….

  17. Brilliant stories in these haiku 🙂

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