Old Man


The old man’s blunder:
thinking that the early rice
would be abundant.
~~ ~~ ~~
a browning paddy
early rice plants withering—
see the old man cringe
~~ ~~ ~~
Choosing to digress
from discussing early rice,
the old man yammers.

© 2013 by Magical Mystical Teacher
More Carpe Diem: “Early Rice”
More Three Word Wednesday: “Blunder, Cringe, Digress”

Posted on September 11, 2013, in Carpe Diem, haiku, senryu, Three Word Wednesday and tagged , . Bookmark the permalink. 13 Comments.

  1. such dark haikus today. It’s terrible that people should go hungry because their crops fail

  2. Most excellent, and the last quite funny.

  3. after all that adversity, the old one seems to shrug and say, ‘oh well’

  4. Poor old man. He’s having quite a time with his rice crop.

  5. The last one more positive. Love it.

  6. Sadly when he yammers he doesn’t want talk of the crop. He has lost that and doesn’t want to lose face as well. I like the way the haiku strung together.

  7. A tough week for the old men of the world. 😦

  8. It’s not easy being a rice farmer, I guess!

    Cooking Early Rice

  9. Such a clever play of the words …. haikus so expressive and narrating such a tale

    its so good!

  10. Look for A Lovely Thing

    Poor blundering, cringing, yammering old man.

  11. not easy when crops are failing….

  12. l composed ‘suite’ MMT … that poor old man

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