Rice Field

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part of a rice field—
in an intimate corner
two women undress
~~ ~~ ~~
the naked women
in one patch of the rice field—
unsatisfied thirst
~~ ~~ ~~
jagged rice stubble—
no place for their lovemaking
in the harvest field

© 2015 by Magical Mystical Teacher
More Carpe Diem: “Basho’s ‘One Patch of a Rice Field'”
More Three Word Wednesday: “Intimate, Jagged, Thirst”


Posted on May 20, 2015, in 5-7-5, Basho, Carpe Diem, Three Word Wednesday and tagged , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 14 Comments.

  1. Oooh nice images this brings to my head. Crisp and to the point, lovely work MMT 🙂

  2. you can really picture this well done

  3. The rice field seems hazardous…but love must be sated….

  4. Yes Iagreewith the last comment. All that stubble! Bravo on thesse haiku though. Love will find a way.

  5. Very nicely done 🙂

  6. lovely … really very nice … except for the stubble. I liked this haiku story very much.

  7. kalpana solsi

    Love and lust satiated among rice stalks. A little story woven of human desires.

  8. Ah MMT, you did a marvelous job…I can only imagine the jagged edges

  9. There seems to be pent-up desires ever prevailing in different situations.


  10. Spines, schmines…Lets get it on. Well done, teacherman.

  11. Awesome response on this haiku by Basho. I like the sensuality and the excitement in these three haiku. Very nice to read the strong love between women.

  12. This is such a great twist! Beautifully stated!

  13. Yes the rice fields do have hidden stories 😉

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