The Probability

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the probability
that she will be sleeping
when he comes
to bring her coffee
bleached white with powder
instead of cream
is great
he sees her lying there
in an impossible heap
of bones
her skin
stretched tight over her skull
and he wonders
if even as she sleeps
she can hear the birds singing
just outside the window
or the sound the bricks make
as they shift uneasily
in their bed of mortar
causing a startled raven
to slam against the house


Poem © 2016 by Magical Mystical Teacher
More Poetry Pantry #297
More Sunday’s Whirligig #54

Posted on April 10, 2016, in poetry, Poetry Pantry, Poets United, Sunday's Whirligig and tagged , , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 22 Comments.

  1. That’s intense… enjoyed it.

  2. The serene setting is dashed with the faux images created by the contrary words that make this into a nightmare.

  3. That was an unexpected ending!

  4. There is something very gothic in an end like that. Just like a real nightmare it jumps from bliss to panic in an instant.

    • magicalmysticalteacher

      Life is like that sometimes, isn’t it?

      On Sun, Apr 10, 2016 at 7:37 AM, Magical Mystical Teacher wrote:


  5. wow…that’s an uncanny twist at the end….

  6. Oh I love the unexpected ending…I too almost like a nightmare we wake from!

  7. Not your usual, but so very fluid, both with imagery and words. Really like that hard tight twist on the end,


    • magicalmysticalteacher

      It’s time to get out of my “usual,” don’t you think? 😉

      On Sun, Apr 10, 2016 at 10:18 AM, Magical Mystical Teacher wrote:


  8. Whoa! Poor raven. Interesting, their “bed of mortar”.

  9. There is an underlying sense of foreboding in this…..perhaps it’s the raven’s demise that does it, but it weaves in so beautifully with the lovely images interspersed throughout that it leaves the reader a little unsettled in a way that glorious writing does.

  10. A cool and intense write!! Your ending is a nice twist.

  11. Wow, that certainly is different from what we have become used to from you! Heavy, deep, dark and…brilliant!

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  12. Gets it off a great twist with the ending. It is an innovative take MMT!


  13. Great twist at the end MMT!


  14. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    Wow, just wow!

  15. Wow. Bad day for the ravens.

  16. Great use of your words… even though I thought they were incompatibly challenging 🙂

  17. I love the change of form – seems to echo the small but lasting passage of time and probably you have shared with us – coffee in bed – could be worse 😉

  18. So different, but I like the intensity and words. Good to break out sometimes.

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