On a Crumbling Wall

 photo SMAhummingbird_zpsc7c5930b.jpg
Section of a mural, San Miguel de Allende, Guanajuato, México

~~ 1 ~~
on a crumbling wall
iridescent hummingbird
in eternal flight—
its whirring wings never stop
as it hovers for a sip
~~ 2 ~~
empty garden bench
where last night’s conversation
still lingers at dawn
patterns of loss and longing
nestling in the wooden slats
~~ 3 ~~
all things softening
as summer moves toward autumn—
even field mice seem
to dwindle into mere fluff
a child’s breath can blow away
~~ 4 ~~
a cold deep pool
where she comes to bathe at dawn
dropping her silk blouse
into the dry stems and weeds
detritus of late summer
~~ 5 ~~
offering herself
as an exile from the world—
the burdock knows why,
and so does the peony
with its extravagant bloom

Tanka and photo © 2016 by Magical Mystical Teacher
More Poetry Pantry #312
More Sunday’s Whirligig #69

Posted on July 24, 2016, in 5-7-5-7-7, Guanajuato, Poetry Pantry, Poets United, San Miguel de Allende, Sunday's Whirligig, tanka and tagged , , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 13 Comments.

  1. Each one more “wonderful” than the last….worlds beckon, so much to think about! Places to wander!

  2. excellent and informative too!

  3. Tanka #3 drew me to read and reread several times

    Happy Sunday

    Much love…

  4. I especially love the conversation of last night still lingering in the slats of the bench next morning. There is a story there. Beautiful summer vignettes to contemplate.

  5. All exquisitely penned…I especially loved #2…what secrets that bench could tell!

  6. Gosh! You keep impressing me with your talented writing. ❤

  7. Wow! This is like reading a story in the round. The woman at the end has become the hummingbird, no longer able to sit still on that garden bench, but now free to reveal herself as the beautiful and unique creature, she alone may become. incredible and haunting imagery MMT. I love it.


  8. Oh, the second one gets me in the gut. Whoa! So powerful.

  9. I enjoyed reading each one.

  10. beautiful, each one but the “iridescent hummingbird” decides to nest in my heart….

  11. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    Beautiful imaginings.

  12. Beautiful set… I loved “patterns of loss and longing
    nestling in the wooden slats”

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