Blackbird, O Blackbird
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Blackbird, O blackbird,
at midnight in the garden,
who can see your wings?
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Blackbird, O blackbird,
even the water trembles
when you start to sing.
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Blackbird, O blackbird,
do you prefer the cypress
over the white rose?
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Blackbird, O blackbird,
how many songs overflow
from your handsome throat?
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Blackbird, O blackbird,
tell me what I need to know
to make your path mine.
~~ ~~ 6 ~~ ~~
Blackbird, O blackbird,
I search the chapel rooftop—
will I find you there?
Haiku © 2018 by Magical Mystical Teacher
More Sunday’s Whirligig #178
More Poetry Pantry #419 at Poets United
Posted on September 9, 2018, in 5-7-5, haiku, Poetry Pantry, Poets United, Sunday's Whirligig and tagged cypress, garden, handsome, midnight, mine, overflow, rooftop, rose, search, tell, trembles, water. Bookmark the permalink. 15 Comments.
Blackbirds are fine by me, they are usually the must trusting of birds.
I love how this reads – like a song
There IS something about a blackbird. They definitely have something to tell us!
I especially like ‘songs overflow from your handsome throat.’ The crow is my totem.
Blackbirds are often misunderstood, but they do have a mysterious song.
I love these blackbird poems. Wonderful!
I love the way you talk to the blackbird… made me think about the poem thirteen ways of looking at a blackbird by Wallace Stevens…
Or as a teacher maybe there should be a poem about blackboards
There COULD be a poem about blackboards, IF any teacher used them anymore! 🙂
On Sun, Sep 9, 2018 at 8:10 AM Magical Mystical Teacher wrote:
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Oh this is precious
Happy Sunday MMT
Much🌻💛🌺love
The progression in this piece is quite nice. I like how it starts with physical observations and ends in the metaphysical.
Oh this is so elegantly done! ❤️
I found this out about blackbirds – if they do not have a mate they do not have a territory and therefore do not sing. I think that is sad. But I loved how this ended in the spiritual realm, from the physical to the spiritual.
This is just a treat to read. A beautifully constructed piece with a hypnotic line of repetition, throughout … I don’t think I have come upon a tanka sequence with repetition used quite this way before, but – Woozers – it really works … and works wonderfully!
I loved blackbirds when I was growing up, but never see them where I live now. I thoroughly enjoyed your addresses to your blackbird.
This is captivating! Even I, want to hear the Blackbird sing😍