The Apartment: a Fictional Haibun

Until I rented this apartment (pink flamingos flank the door!), I had to walk up three long flights of stairs. Now I’m on the ground floor, and even have a little kitchen garden, where I grow basil, chives, and parsley. I’ve squeezed in one tomato plant and one pepper. After supper each night, I set aside my sorrows (who knew that life could be so difficult?), and pore over maps of far-off places, dreaming of cruises that last for years, not weeks. Could there be a better way to spend my twilight days?


Burn down, white candle,
veer off course, distant planets—
my wineglass is full!


Haibun © 2019 by Magical Mystical Teacher
More Sunday’s Whirligig #231
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Posted on September 15, 2019, in 5-7-5, haibun, Poetry Pantry, Poets United, Sunday's Whirligig and tagged , , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 16 Comments.

  1. What a wonderful celebration…

  2. Sounds a bit melancholy. (I know it is not true) But sometimes those dreams (such as of a cruise) can become a reality in time.

  3. Finding yourself in such a place will sooner or later happen to most of us… best way is to find a path onward in travel,

  4. I read that the cost of a cruise is cheaper than care in a facility, so it sounds like a good plan!

    • magicalmysticalteacher

      You’re too funny, Sherry! 🙂

      On Sun, Sep 15, 2019 at 8:30 AM Magical Mystical Teacher wrote:


      • haha – I actually saw a news segment that elderly people are staying in hotels instead of retirement living facilities. It’s cheaper and it comes with breakfast, maid service and someone is around if something should happen. Also, has a gym and pool. That sounds like a good plan and you can do some traveling.

  5. This feels like an invocation…which makes me wonder where it might take a traveler. 🙂

  6. I don’t know if it’s what you intended, but I enjoyed a bit of “devil-may-care” in this. I loved the new life emerging.

  7. This is incredibly poignant!

  8. It is cheaper to go on cruises than to live in a facility – free cosmetics, free medical care, 24 hour food entertainment…

  9. Wonderful! Very smart … very cool … writing. Your have deftly imbued both the prose and haiku with a vague feeling of ‘something-missing’ (which juxtaposes awesomely again ‘my wineglass is full’). That feeling, I think, is very compelling and very relatable for many of us in our twilight days (I know it is for me). I think the way in which you have spoken to that, here, is quite insightful and makes for a truly especial haibun.

  10. Sounds a lot like me in my apartment, only I am on next floor up in case a sunami comes and there is a flood!

    • magicalmysticalteacher

      If a flood ever reaches your apartment, you are in trouble!

      On Sun, Sep 15, 2019 at 6:56 PM Magical Mystical Teacher wrote:


  11. Pretty, MMT. Just think, a full wineglass is much better than an empty one. Mrs. Jim has been retired now for 20 years, me for 18. We try to take at least two cruises a year and haven’t driven overseas since Wales in 2013. If we try driving again it will be France again. Europe is easy to drive.

  12. Any place with pink flamingos fresh herbs and a good water supply is fine by me …

  13. I’ll take that full wineglass any day! It should make the day-dreaming much better!!

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