My Father

 photo 114_zps10b110d5.jpg
 
 
The first line of each senryu comes from “Blood” by Naomi Shihab Nye. (The father in these vignettes is strictly the product of my imagination.)
 
 


My father would say
that the tracks at the pond’s edge
can yield no answers.
 
~~ ~~
 
My father told me
not to mess with simple things,
only complex ones.
 
~~ ~~
 
My father would say,
“When the car’s out of gas, you
gotta start walking.”
 
~~ ~~
 
My father told me
that some people have no class,
so steer clear of them.
 
~~ ~~
 
My father would say,
“Kid, you cannot build a house
with lie upon lie.”
 
~~ ~~
 
My father told me
where he kept important files,
so that when he died…
 
~~ ~~
 
I call my father
to tell him that the forest
now lies pale and still.
 

 
© 2013 by Magical Mystical Teacher
 
 
More The Sunday Whirl, Wordle 114

Posted on June 23, 2013, in Naomi Shihab Nye, senryu, The Sunday Whirl and tagged . Bookmark the permalink. 21 Comments.

  1. A really engaging sequence of work. I enjoyed reading this. Would have liked to meet your father too.

  2. Very sensible things said by your father!! Some made me smile too!! What a blessing it is to have your elders near you for guidance!! The treasured memories will always remain, of all the special things that they said!!

  3. Wise man, your father…

  4. If you do build your house on lie’s, you better have gas in the car. You’ll need it for your get away!

  5. It would be great to have a father to come up with such adages.

  6. Sounds like a wise father!

  7. Love the commonality and wisdom. Well done!

  8. As always – I smile, I sigh, I bow 🙂

  9. Very nice piece. Well done. Accessible and touching. Randy

  10. Your poem and the note preceding it intrigues me, bringing up the place of fiction in poetry as you seem to have done. That and the whole idea of ‘voice’….. the narrator vs. the poet and if and when to explain. This was probably covered in Poetry 101 but I’ve forgotten it all! And now I’m getting a headache Not from your poem… from my ruminations! My favorite is the last one….I want to know more about this pale still forest! Wherein The Muse’s Vehicle Goes Into the Shop For Repairs

    • magicalmysticalteacher

      A headache preceding surgery is not a good thing… 🙂

    • magicalmysticalteacher

      I felt the need to explain that “I” am not the narrator, and that the father in the poem is not my father, because I didn’t want to mislead readers into thinking that my father was given to speaking in aphorisms (he most definitely was not), although, the older I grow, the more I realise that he was really a very wise man indeed.

  11. A poignant series of haiku/senryu.

  12. The forest lays pale and still. Excellent.

  13. I like the second best.

  14. i’m just reading today; enjoyed m ; haven’t done mine yet; maybe within the next 2 days; have a nice Sunday

    much love…

  15. Nicely done. My father offered me many wise words as well.

    Regarding wordver, sorry, but this is what happened the last time I turned it off: Word Verification. I have a full-time job, and removing spam from my blog isn’t it. If wordver means less comments, so be it.

  16. Ohhhh. That last one is haunting. So well done.

  17. Sage and good words and i enjoyed reading

  18. Truly lovely – tears are stinging my eyes right now – all the wonderful “Songs My Father Taught Me.”

  19. A set of great advices and you treasured it all within as a guide through life. It’s an education to us too MMT! Thanks for sharing!

    Hank

Please Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.