Winter Afternoon

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A splintered tree on a winter’s day, Sonoran Desert, Southern Arizona
 
 


  
~~ 1 ~~
  
Winter afternoon—
all his broken promises
come back to haunt her.
  
~~ 2 ~~
  
Winter afternoon—
her resistance to the cold
is growing weaker.
  
~~ 3 ~~
  
winter afternoon—
hearing the forecast with doubt
and great suspicion
  
~~ 4 ~~
  
Winter afternoon—
that clown of a weatherman
talks only in lies.
  
~~ 5 ~~
  
Winter afternoon—
her defiance of the cold
weakens by the hour.
  
~~ 6 ~~
  
Winter afternoon—
something in her soul demands
a bold new action.
  
~~ 7 ~~
  
Winter afternoon—
unafraid of the wind chill
she ventures outdoors,
embraced by the great white void
that erases her footsteps.

 
Haiku and tanka © 2017 by Magical Mystical Teacher
  
  
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Posted on January 29, 2017, in 5-7-5, 5-7-5-7-7, Arizona, haiku, Macro Monday 2, Poetry Pantry, Poets United, Sunday's Whirligig, tanka and tagged , , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 18 Comments.

  1. Sometimes you just have to look it in the face and stomp it out.

  2. Warm Wishes

    much love…

  3. Beautiful! Especially no 6 ❤️

  4. You have captured a winter feel of bleakness.

  5. From resistance to immersion – a therapeutic path.

  6. I love that she although she’s afraid, she doesn’t falter. Winter will always be a bully, but a warm soul always knows that she can fight back. And when she does, she lives.

  7. Winter afternoons in Sweden is very dark and almost night… I long for daylight

  8. The repetition of the first line across all of these works so effectively to convey a sense of how long this winter season seems to go on and on. I enjoyed all of this individually as well. Really well written.

  9. Yes, those broken promises…..hard to forget them in the dead of winter.

  10. Whoa! Followed them all into winter’s oblivion… very dramatic.

  11. This is incredible. I love how you connected them all with the same opening line and then brought it all home with that phenomenal tanka.

  12. I felt sorry for the weatherman for he doesn’t lie but merely forecast a likely scenario. Mind you they are pretty good in Australia as we have no high mountain ranges to interfere too much.

  13. Glad she made a decision to resist the cold. Can’t help but think of our political climate.

  14. Numbers 2, 3, 4, 5, and 6 describe me. (All but the first and last). Your poetry is too beautiful for me to make a joke though and I’m ashamed of myself for doing so.

  15. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    Fabulous photo.

    I sympathise with your protagonist; hate the cold myself.

  16. Some of these explorers actually come back to tell us about it. Wow. What does it take for a culture to find a new way forward? I mean, we have Noah’s story and others. But what of today’s people who have snapped away from their homes?

  17. Loved these haiku that were so connected with the repeating first line. I like how she progressed through the winter afternoons.

  18. I like the sort of theme running through these. 1,6, & 7 are my favorites.

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