Two-Word Whirl

Sep 1

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wet laundry
snapping on the line
gust by gust
 
~~ ~~ ~~
 
lost lamb
shepherd calls
faint bleat

 
Text © 2013 by Magical Mystical Teacher
 
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Posted on September 1, 2013, in Carpe Diem, haiku, September Heights 2013, The Sunday Whirl and tagged . Bookmark the permalink. 22 Comments.

  1. a spirit of simplicity | September 1, 2013 at 10:27 am

    I picture a lovely spring morning…not sure if that’s where you were headed or not.

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  2. WabiSabi | September 1, 2013 at 2:24 pm

    Wow! I haven’t seen a clothes line in many, many years! Brought back such good memories. Thanks!
    The second poem evokes much sadness though…..although with a smidgen of hope in the last line!

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  3. brenda w | September 1, 2013 at 2:32 pm

    I love laundry on the line…. and think maybe the lamb got wrapped up in the sheets. 🙂

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  4. jazzbumpa | September 1, 2013 at 3:38 pm

    a childhood memory in the first

    second is hopeful

    Cheers!
    JzB

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  5. daphnepurpus | September 1, 2013 at 6:49 pm

    love the laundry line and I hope the faint bleat is heard! Very nice!

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  6. Old Egg | September 2, 2013 at 1:18 am

    I loved the “onomatopoeia” feeling of both pieces with ‘snapping’ and ‘gust’ and ‘calls’ and ‘bleat’.

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  7. Misky | September 2, 2013 at 7:37 am

    First one; perfection. My rotary line clunked me on the head after a suddenly gust of wind yesterday. I am sportin’ a bump and a bruise.

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    • magicalmysticalteacher | September 2, 2013 at 7:49 am

      I am old enough that when I read “rotary line,” the first thing that came to mind was “telephone.” Then I wondered why a telephone would hit you in the head! Took me a minute to realise that “rotary line” means “whirling, twirling clothesline.” 😉

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  8. whimsygizmo | September 2, 2013 at 4:51 pm

    I love the way those last two words called to you, and prompted these beautiful lines. 🙂

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  9. Irene Golembo | September 2, 2013 at 8:56 pm

    Nice sounds in both haiku, and images’re staying with me.. for while…lol nicely done

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  10. GILLENA COX | September 3, 2013 at 4:10 am

    luv the animation in the laundry ku

    much love…

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  11. veronicabalfourpaul | September 3, 2013 at 8:10 am

    I love this! I love the sound of wet laundry snapping in the wind and the sound of sheep in the hills. Really neat. 5 stars!

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  12. tigerbrite | September 3, 2013 at 9:34 am

    Very vocal these. Both sounds described so well:)

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  13. Look for A Lovely Thing | September 3, 2013 at 10:11 am

    I like these. They’re minimalist! Awesome!

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  14. jazzbumpa | September 3, 2013 at 2:54 pm

    strangely
    your second one resonates
    with my free style

    Cheers!
    JzB

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  17. hotei | September 4, 2013 at 6:26 am

    Love the second one “the faint bleat” it is “hopeful”. very nicely penned 🙂

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  18. Panchali | September 4, 2013 at 12:14 pm

    Oh, they create brilliant images, MMT!! Stunning….

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  19. Amrit Sinha | September 7, 2013 at 1:12 pm

    Brilliant stories in these haiku 🙂

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