Old Man

The old man’s blunder:
thinking that the early rice
would be abundant.

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a browning paddy
early rice plants withering—
see the old man cringe

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Choosing to digress
from discussing early rice,
the old man yammers.

© 2013 by Magical Mystical Teacher

More Carpe Diem: “Early Rice”

More Three Word Wednesday: “Blunder, Cringe, Digress”

Posted on September 11, 2013, in Carpe Diem, haiku, senryu, Three Word Wednesday and tagged haiku, senryu. Bookmark the permalink. 13 Comments.

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Sheilagh Lee | September 11, 2013 at 9:22 am

such dark haikus today. It’s terrible that people should go hungry because their crops fail

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Mishla | September 11, 2013 at 3:35 pm

Most excellent, and the last quite funny.

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4joy | September 11, 2013 at 5:27 pm

after all that adversity, the old one seems to shrug and say, ‘oh well’

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Maggie Grace | September 11, 2013 at 7:29 pm

Poor old man. He’s having quite a time with his rice crop.

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Irene Golembo | September 11, 2013 at 10:21 pm

The last one more positive. Love it.

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Old Egg | September 12, 2013 at 12:06 am

Sadly when he yammers he doesn’t want talk of the crop. He has lost that and doesn’t want to lose face as well. I like the way the haiku strung together.

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J Cosmo Newbery | September 12, 2013 at 4:35 am

A tough week for the old men of the world. 😦

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Mark M. Redfearn | September 12, 2013 at 5:44 am

It’s not easy being a rice farmer, I guess!

Cooking Early Rice

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Anya Padyam | September 12, 2013 at 8:29 am

Such a clever play of the words …. haikus so expressive and narrating such a tale

its so good!

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Look for A Lovely Thing | September 12, 2013 at 11:23 am

Poor blundering, cringing, yammering old man.

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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) | September 12, 2013 at 2:14 pm

not easy when crops are failing….

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paintswithwords | September 12, 2013 at 2:18 pm

excellent write

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Chèvrefeuille | September 14, 2013 at 7:04 am

l composed ‘suite’ MMT … that poor old man

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